I have to agree with greezebelieve (who commented on your dA) about the font size.
I think because of the size, the "key features" you advertise up the top look awkwardly placed. Especially the first part "2.8" touchscreen..." being on two lines.

I also think that where you've coloured certain words pink, you should try to rearrange because, to me, it looks pretty messy.

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Something possibly like so:


introducing the LG Voyager....
   - 2.8" TOUCH & secondary messaging screens
   - QWERTY keyboard
   - V CAST mobile tv access
   - 2.0 MEGAPIXEL camera
   - FULL WEB browsing




I understand that above is red.
Something like that just looks more organized, tidier, and more professional in my opinion.


Last Edit: Dec 9, 2010 23:56:36 GMT by Stinky666